Good! Constructive criticism: last paragraph, first two sentences are a bit too much. I like your style of writing, but you put a little too much into those sentences. Spread those words, idioms, and turns of phrases out just a bit more. They need pacing.
Good! Constructive criticism: last paragraph, first two sentences are a bit too much. I like your style of writing, but you put a little too much into those sentences. Spread those words, idioms, and turns of phrases out just a bit more. They need pacing.